new story

Hey, guys!
I've put a new story called The Bodyguard at my website. Feel free to go anytime and read it! It's at:
http://denisefelt.weebly.com/the-bodyguard.html
The tagline reads: When SHADO receives an ultimatum from the aliens, Commander Straker is forced to increase his personal security.
(This is a companion story to the episode Psychobombs.)
Yours,
Denise

Not to be outdone I also have a new story! Also called The Bodyguard !( My response to the challenge in the Shado Writers Guild)
On my website under 'Other UFO Stories'

http://lightcudder.weebly.com

Tagline; a name from the past comes back to haunt the SHADO Commander
Louise
(and Denise's story is GREAT!)

--- In [hidden email], "Neesierie" <neesierie@...> wrote:
>
> Hey, guys!
> I've put a new story called The Bodyguard at my website. Feel free to go anytime and read it! It's at:
> http://denisefelt.weebly.com/the-bodyguard.html
> The tagline reads: When SHADO receives an ultimatum from the aliens, Commander Straker is forced to increase his personal security.
> (This is a companion story to the episode Psychobombs.)
> Yours,
> Denise
>

Hi Denise,

VERY good stuff! An insightful and very thought-provoking reading of Straker's psychology under exceptional and difficult circumstances.

Kind regards,

Griff

--- In [hidden email], "Neesierie" <neesierie@...> wrote:
>
> Hey, guys!
> I've put a new story called The Bodyguard at my website. Feel free to go anytime and read it! It's at:
> http://denisefelt.weebly.com/the-bodyguard.html
> The tagline reads: When SHADO receives an ultimatum from the aliens, Commander Straker is forced to increase his personal security.
> (This is a companion story to the episode Psychobombs.)
> Yours,
> Denise
>

--- In [hidden email], "griffwason" <griff@...> wrote:
> VERY good stuff! An insightful and very thought-provoking reading of Straker's psychology under exceptional and difficult circumstances.

Griff,
Thanks so much for the feedback! It had dawned on me that I rarely ever set up a story where it stays on Straker's POV throughout. So this time I did, and I was rather surprised with the results myself! The pressures of his job are phenomenal, and it was fun to be able to show that to some degree. And to give him a break! *grin*  

And it had the added bonus of making me no longer hate that episode. Whichwas a really cool episode until Foster does the complete duh! thing by bringing her to HQ. What were the writers thinking?

So glad you enjoyed the story!
Yours,
Denise

Hi Denise,

Do you mean that you 'hate' "The Psychobombs" because the script/story/concept was bad, or because you can't believe Foster could be so stupid as to bring such a potentially dangerous individual to SHADO HQ, and in the process break every rule in the book?

Surely, the message and central concept behind the whole episode is that the aliens are relying on humans' weaknesses to mitigate their plans:

- Straker could have just driven straight past Daniel Clark, but human nature made him stop to see what the problem was, and possibly help out.

- The SHADO security men, Commander Straker (reluctantly) and the SkyDiver crew 'assumed' no human could get past the security trap, and hence access to SkyDiver, and the resultant destruction. The SkyDiver crew made a 'human' assumption about the capabilities of a 'normal' human captive, and lost their lives as a consequence. Straker was getting wise to the alien plan by then, and knew he was next on the list.

- Paul Foster was clearly brainwashed (not in control of his actions) into bringing Linda Simmonds (who used her sexuality to sway Foster) directly toSHADO HQ (and it is clear that Commander Straker suspects this). After all, it is only by gaining access 'in person' to the electrical sub-system in SHADO Control that Linda Simmonds can use her 'Phychobomb' powers and thus able to destroy SHADO Control.

Commander Straker clearly states that it was 'his' decision to let Linda Simmonds into SHADO HQ in the end...

Sure, from the outside (and to Col. Lake) it is a totally daft and irrational thing for Paul Foster to do. But, in the context of being brainwashed (another sign of potential human weakness) at the time and to Paul Foster it seemed a logical thing to do.

Many times Col. Freeman implies Commander Straker 'thinks' more like a computer than a human being, and after all it is Commander Straker's logical and deductive reasoning that foils the aliens' plan in this episode. It is Commander Straker that in this episode (and many others) is the deciding factor in defeating the aliens.

Sure, in the space of 45 minutes, it is a very short time to get a complex plot successfully across, and sure there are weaknesses in the episode, butthat IS what I love about UFO. It was what was left out that so spurs the imagination... to much clarity is boring and doesn't fire the imagination.

Thanks again :)

Griff
 
--- In [hidden email], "Neesierie" <neesierie@...> wrote:

Griff,
Thanks so much for the feedback! It had dawned on me that I rarely ever set up a story where it stays on Straker's POV throughout. So this time I did, and I was rather surprised with the results myself! The pressures of his job are phenomenal, and it was fun to be able to show that to some degree. And to give him a break! *grin*  
 
And it had the added bonus of making me no longer hate that episode. Whichwas a really cool episode until Foster does the complete duh! thing by bringing her to HQ. What were the writers thinking?
 
So glad you enjoyed the story!
Yours,
Denise

--- In [hidden email], "griffwason" <griff@...> wrote:
It was what was left out that so spurs the imagination... to much clarity is boring and doesn't fire the imagination.

Griff,
You are so right! Without all those 'holes' in the plot, I wouldn't have been able to fill them with my story, would I? *grin* Imagination to the rescue once again!  
Yours,
Denise

Just watched the ending of the episode. Yes, Paul brought her to Shado without orders, but Straker knew about it before she arrived, and could have stopped Paul, if he wanted to, but decided against it, felt it was better to battle her and her alien controllers on his turf, and even told Paul later, it was his decision, not Pauls to bring her there.

Bruce
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Subject: [SHADO] Re: new story



Hi Denise,

Do you mean that you 'hate' "The Psychobombs" because the script/story/concept was bad, or because you can't believe Foster could be so stupid as to bring such a potentially dangerous individual to SHADO HQ, and in the process break every rule in the book?

Surely, the message and central concept behind the whole episode is that the aliens are relying on humans' weaknesses to mitigate their plans:

- Straker could have just driven straight past Daniel Clark, but human nature made him stop to see what the problem was, and possibly help out.

- The SHADO security men, Commander Straker (reluctantly) and the SkyDiver crew 'assumed' no human could get past the security trap, and hence access to SkyDiver, and the resultant destruction. The SkyDiver crew made a 'human' assumption about the capabilities of a 'normal' human captive, and lost their lives as a consequence. Straker was getting wise to the alien plan by then, and knew he was next on the list.

- Paul Foster was clearly brainwashed (not in control of his actions) into bringing Linda Simmonds (who used her sexuality to sway Foster) directly to SHADO HQ (and it is clear that Commander Straker suspects this). After all, it is only by gaining access 'in person' to the electrical sub-system in SHADO Control that Linda Simmonds can use her 'Phychobomb' powers and thus able to destroy SHADO Control.

Commander Straker clearly states that it was 'his' decision to let Linda Simmonds into SHADO HQ in the end...

Sure, from the outside (and to Col. Lake) it is a totally daft and irrational thing for Paul Foster to do. But, in the context of being brainwashed (another sign of potential human weakness) at the time and to Paul Foster it seemed a logical thing to do.

Many times Col. Freeman implies Commander Straker 'thinks' more like a computer than a human being, and after all it is Commander Straker's logical and deductive reasoning that foils the aliens' plan in this episode. It is Commander Straker that in this episode (and many others) is the deciding factor in defeating the aliens.

Sure, in the space of 45 minutes, it is a very short time to get a complex plot successfully across, and sure there are weaknesses in the episode, but that IS what I love about UFO. It was what was left out that so spurs the imagination... to much clarity is boring and doesn't fire the imagination.

Thanks again :)

Griff

--- In [hidden email], "Neesierie" <neesierie@...> wrote:

Griff,
Thanks so much for the feedback! It had dawned on me that I rarely ever set up a story where it stays on Straker's POV throughout. So this time I did, and I was rather surprised with the results myself! The pressures of his job are phenomenal, and it was fun to be able to show that to some degree. And to give him a break! *grin*

And it had the added bonus of making me no longer hate that episode. Which was a really cool episode until Foster does the complete duh! thing by bringing her to HQ. What were the writers thinking?

So glad you enjoyed the story!
Yours,
Denise






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